Comic 12 - Kinas Chronicle: Part Five

23rd Nov 2012, 6:00 PM in Info Comics
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Author Notes:

Bree 23rd Nov 2012, 6:00 PM edit delete
Bree
"What? Three updates in a week?!? You're crazy, man!"

To be fair, yes, yes, I am. :P

But honestly, I want to be done with this Chronicle as quickly as possible. (Plus the fact that this is a mostly-text comic.)
Contrary to what the last words imply, there are at least two more parts--I have to deal with the conclusion of the battle and its fallout (part six), and show what happened to Kinas because of it (part seven). I don't think I'll need a part eight, but still, that's seven parts; I'd much prefer not to spend too much time on his chronicle.

For instance, I've kinda been wanting to work on profiles.


Anyway, a summary of the comic--the battle was going well, but it dragged on and on, wearing the defenders down. After fighting non-stop for hours, The Elementals were challenged by the commander of the invading army, who proceeded to wipe the floor with them, gloating about his imminent victory.

Which turns out to be a really bad idea, as he lets slip the fact that Faragawa, the previous home to six of the eight Elementals (Kinas included--see part one), was destroyed by his master.

This gave The Elementals a second wind, and Kinas got to taste the power of rage, one of the things which ultimately lead him down his current path. It lasted until the Agent revealed who he was, paralyzing half The Elementals and leaving them easy to dispatch.

This showed the strength of darkness to Kinas, and also instilled his bitterness, because HE didn't freeze up. HE wasn't the one who dropped his defenses. It was SANIK who caused it, and Kinas has never forgiven either himself or Sanik for it.

Kinas was the last of The Elementals to fall, after his promise to protect Sinaer was broken, and with the last great hero of the nation fallen, the already weakened and atrophied defenders lost hope and scattered.

Helops had fallen helpless to the army...
...Or did it?

Comments:

MatthewJA 23rd Nov 2012, 6:32 PM edit delete reply
MatthewJA
text
LazyBrian 23rd Nov 2012, 7:16 PM edit delete reply
And lots of it. :P

It's an unfortunate side-effect of the chronicle having so much to tell. If every single comic had panels such as, say, part three's first and last panels...

...Well, then, you'd have a LOT more panels needed. :P
(That's, again, why this comic was released today--since it doesn't have much visually, it's not worthy of the Monday release. :P)


Part Six has a few more images, though. Not many, but more than here. (Part seven has a lot more--not as many as I would prefer, but enough to satisfy.)
MatthewJA 23rd Nov 2012, 7:35 PM edit delete reply
MatthewJA
you gotta work on being concise and putting things into pictures

a picture tells a thousand words

word = picture/1000
Bree 23rd Nov 2012, 10:46 PM edit delete reply
Bree
If this were third person, that'd be easier, but since this is a first person narrative, I can't break from Kinas's tone.

He's not a very concise person, but I'm doing what I can. For instance, showing the hug rather than describing how he said goodbye to Sinaer way back in part two.

Though I'll also admit, a lot of the reason for the text is that--while I know what the scene looks like in my head, and I can describe it with words--I can't for the life of me figure out how to draw it.

For instance, Ian Oman. I know he's an old man, and I even know what he looks like. (Pretty much like the old man at the end of time from Chrono Trigger.) But I can't figure out how to draw him.

And the Agent of Chaos you saw described here in the comic. I know what he looks like, from his armor to his helmet to his very face. (His armor and helmet is reminiscent of the starter villain in Wing It, one of my other attempted comics. You know, this guy, only less badly drawn. :P)

And Voss. I know his height, I know his build, I know his weight and his general looks. Can't draw him. I've tried, but I just can't pull it off.


Same thing for part seven, which you'll be seeing soon enough. I wanted to show a shot of each city and what happened to them. But for some reason, despite having the mental image, despite having already drawn a map of Helopia, I just couldn't get it onto the page. I couldn't make it real, no matter how much I tried. :/

Butyeah. On the latter half of part seven, where I WAS able to draw it, things get much better.
The only reason the last panel is text is 'cause part seven's too long as it is, and I didn't want it to be even longer with another four panels showing what the above panels will imply. :P

Since I haven't actually drawn part eight (which I deemed necessary), yet, I'll do what I can to make it be as picture-full as possible.


...In summary, you're right, and I'll do what I can.
MatthewJA 23rd Nov 2012, 10:55 PM edit delete reply
MatthewJA
It's totally possible to monologue with pictures. You just gotta think outside the box... somehow.
LazyBrian 23rd Nov 2012, 11:18 PM edit delete reply
Totally right about it being possible. It's just the "somehow" part that's the problem. :P


The chronicle's almost over (and already has the next two parts drawn, anyway), so it won't do me much good for the Kinas Chronicle.
And I don't really monologue much in the main comic, either.

But for when I *do*, I'll need to do so.
Quite frankly, I'd prefer to avoid monologues in the first place, but for Kinas's chronicle, it was necessary.

And other monologues will eventually happen, and I'm currently tackling how I'm going to handle them. (Not for a while, mind you, but they will.)

Kinas's Chronicle is serving, shall we say, as a bit of a testing ground for the comic as a whole, letting me see what I can do with what.

And in that regard, I have no regrets for it, 'cause it's worked. Even if not as well as I was hoping. :P
Centcomm 23rd Nov 2012, 7:54 PM edit delete reply
Centcomm
for text its pretty good .. wondering where this is going.. :D
Bree 23rd Nov 2012, 10:52 PM edit delete reply
Bree
Well, before I was a webcomic artist, I was a writer, so that's why I can write the text so well. :P

It might be verbose, but it's informative and descriptive. It's a little cinematic, and slightly poetic in its execution.

At least, that's what others have told me of my writing. I do a good job when I use words to make it so that the words used convey the tone, the scene, the very picture, with the effect I'm aiming for, even if the art fails.

At least, that's what I hope for when I do this sort of thing. :P

As my above comment to Matt illustrates, I'd much prefer not having to rely on text (it's a crutch I'd rather not lean on), but when I must, I at least do the best I can to make the scene play out in readers' minds.

How they rallied the troops only to be struck down (a-la-Theodin-style), how there was a dramatic unmasking, how one by one they died in front of Kinas.

If this were a movie, I think people would be able to tell exactly how it played out from my description in the comic, and if they can, then I've done my job, albeit in a highly unrefined crude despicable format. :P
Centcomm 23rd Nov 2012, 11:14 PM edit delete reply
Centcomm
its not despicable .. sheesh . its a story told by words or art .. its still a story. :D
LazyBrian 23rd Nov 2012, 11:22 PM edit delete reply
True, despicable wasn't quite the word I was looking for, but it was shorter than "not what I would like doing" while conveying much the same meaning. :P

I don't really mind telling a story by words, but I just don't like forcing it on others, when telling it by art would be more aesthetically pleasing, both to the reader and to me, the creator, for having pulled off the art. I've managed to do so to some extent for the chronicle, but not as much as I'd prefer. :P
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